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[End Of 09]

Really does rap up 2009

This could really use some rapping added into it. And it sadlly does rap up the year with how destructive and emotional it's been for the entire world. I love it; It's emotional, descriptive and it combines all sorts of genres. Unlike most hip-hop, this includes a lot of different electronic sounds, acoustic strings and techno sound effects. It also reminded me of iran at the beginning for some reason. incredible song.

I just don't like the laughing at the end...it's really weird. Rather than adding glitch to the laughing, i think it should be more solid and strait forward. Ever heard Feel Good Inc.? Gorillaz added laughing into that song pretty well at the end, check it out!

I hope i gave a useful review: would you mind reviewing a song or two of mine? Thanks!

[Crucial Moments(Part 2)]

Old jazzy meets new heavy beats

Piano seems to be a little off at times, and i'm thinking it's because you're swinging the piano, but not the beats. It feels like you're going for more of an eighth note feel, so adjust the piano to that if you want to. Repetitive now because there aren't any lyrics, but the percussion keep you attentive, so that's always good in a background, but make sure that you line up the rapping with the percussion, because it would sound really weird if you didn't. If you're going to add rapping to this, let me know!

LyRikLyNkLyNd responds:

Yea, I don't really kno what I'ma do with this, I dis-like the samples, so I might just chalk all that up and just keep my drums to do sumthin else with.

[Mind Games/feat LyrklyNklynd]

aside from the awesome lyrics and deep meaning...

my only criticisms are that:

Try to make the beggining a bit more different than the rest of the song so that it's easier to tell that you're mocking someone else

the rapping seems a little off through the second half: as if the pronunciations are a little slow and there are too many syllables per word (you could definetly pull it off though)

I completely agree with everything in these lyrics! They're incredible, and you have some serious talent. I won't pretend like I've got a lot of experience with rapping (just check out http://www.myspace.com/juvenileparadi se lol that was a long time ago) but i know enough to know that this is really really good stuff! The backgrounds are fantastic, and no matter how many times they repeat, they never get old. keep it up!

LyRikLyNkLyNd responds:

Damn you for makein go back and work on this song, I just realized what you're sayin bout the second verse, it's way off in the first 8 bars, SHIT

[Project Pianoi - Track 3]

still pretty stiff, but it's nicely simple

Has a great happy upbeat feel to it. I can understand why you think it sucks when you compare it to other great pianists, but this is a nicely done beginner to intermediate song. simplicity is really hard to come by with piano, and you nailed it right on the head. it's pretty good, anything you want to do with it is up to you.

Jnr1114 responds:

Yeah. I can make it better if I added stuff but I am doing plane piano songs for awhile.

[JNR - ~Toxicated~]

WOW. Greatly improved!!

The first two thirds of it are still pretty repetitive, but not in a bad way. i think you nailed the effects and variety of sounds, even though you used the same theme a lot. the synth at 0:48 felt a little empty, so it caught my attention. maybe add something there, or just make sure it doesn't go back that that synth by itself in 1:02. A flat out pause in the song for that part at 1:02 might sound really good.

synth at the beginning could be used again? up to you

chimes are still a little bit loud at 1:24. maybe add some effects to the chimes? it's up to you, it just seems a little out of place to me with everything else electronic.

Just minor details on this one. you could leave it as it is, or you could just refine it a bit, if you feel like it ;)

You improved this song incredibly. I'm very impressed. And considering that you just started in November, just think about how good you'll be in this next year! Keep up the great work!!

Jnr1114 responds:

Ok, thanks! I will probably just replace this upload with a new one. This one already has good votes so I wouldn't want to ruin it :P

[Project Pianoi - Track 2]

Main theme is pretty cheesy

I think that everything around the main theme is really good. The feel that i get from everything else besides the main theme (part it starts out with) has more of a resentful/sentimental feel to it. The main theme just doesn't really fit with the rest of the song, for me anyways. The part that starts at 1:33 is really good. You nailed the genre, but I think the styles could be extended on from either side (the beggining theme, or the progressive and resentful/sentimental parts of the song)

Great music though. I can't believe you just started in november. that's incredible

Jnr1114 responds:

The main theme for me was a little skippy. That is why I didn't like it.

At 1:33, it was most favorite melody I have made so far. I think it is beautiful, I think I got lucky :p

Hopefully I will improve, feels like I am getting nowhere :(
Thanks for the review!

[Project Pianoi - Track 1]

I think i reviewed this one before

It's got almost a chinese feel to it. I love the progression and rythms, and the percussion adds a really nice touch to it. As far as suggestions go, i think that the piano is a little stiff. Like, you can tell it was made on a program, so if you got on a grand piano or something, it would sound really really really cool. Great job. everything i would say was pretty much covered by ac371 :P

Jnr1114 responds:

Yeah. I am very disappointed on the piano. With track 3, I used a new one which I like. I need to re upload this one with the new piano and maybe do some velocity changes.

[Guitar Vs. Chip]

Makes for a great combination

Lol, this is awesome. for some reason it reminds me of one of those space-anime clips, but not in a bad way. The synth is pretty awesome and relaxed, but intense at the same time. I seriously think that if you keep on making music like this, you could make it really far in music. recording companies, ddr features, stuff like that.

(psst, i think you're better than paragon X9, but don't tell anybody!)

I think you've reviewed my music before, but if you wouldn't mind, could you check out some of the new stuff i've made? thanks!

Fantomenk responds:

Thanks man, i wont say a word :P..

ofcourse ill take a look at your work!